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The dogs were barking, following her. Hunting her. They had been trained to do this she knew. The wind hurried along side her, urging her on. He whipped her hair, and tossed her gown. He had panicked.
"How can one man stop this ending?...."
She struggled over the broken ground, tripping over brush. They apoligized, anguished at their adherance. She ran. Her eyes were wild, like the sky she thought. Streaked and bright.
The dogs bayed. They had seen her.
"I couldn't help but to hear an exchanging of words..."
She fell. Her cry echoed. The wind stilled. He hadn't heard her voice in almost a millenium. The hawks nearby quieted, hushing their offspring in respect and fear. The dogs ceased their calls, tails tucked low. The unseen men halted. Their eyes were wide. They had never heard any language like that, nor any animal emit that cry.
"I spin, colliding into sound..."
She was crying. She reached for the sky and begged or safety. For solace, for freedom, for....for hope.
The rain fell, all at once, crying with her. The wind howled, holding her close. Her eyes fluttered shut, and she shuddered, voicing nothing more. Her grandfathers groaned, yelling their insults in the old language.
The men found her. She lay on the ground, her gown filthy and torn. Blood stained the hem, and ran in a pink line, mixed with the water droplets, along her legs.
Her grandfathers swayed, scratching and whipping at the men, fighting them for their granddaughter.
" A sea of fury, crashing like a tidal wave..."
She was pale. Her breathing was slow. The wind swirled, surrounding the men. They had her clutched, trapped, in their arms, and were struggling to keep upright. He was desperate to help her.
She raised a small hand, and weakly grasped the wind's own.
"Wait." She whispered in his language. Her hand slipped from his grasp, and hung, swinging with the men's steps.
They marched on, yelling incoherently to eachother.
The wind fell to his knees, the rain forming his tears. They had taken his little girl.

The head nurse thumped the IV drip, and frowned at nothing. "It's not like anyone would miss her anyway." She glared in disdain before stalking out of the girl's infirmary room.
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I..... I almost started crying when I wrote this.
really.
so tell me what you think.
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A horribly vivid image of a death dream. An entreme saddness a sence of hope and hopeless rolled into one. A very nice piece.

If you get the chance check out a movie called "Sublime" kinda B-movie status. It is a vivid horror about the fear of hosipitals and mistreatment there in. So many horrible nightmares shown in such a vivid manner it makes you question where dream starts and reality ends.

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“It is only after we’ve lost everything that we are free to do anything”
Tyler Durden “Fight club”

“He who makes a beast of himself gets rid of the pain of being a man.”
Dr. Johnson “Fear and loathing in Las Vegas.”
That sounds like an interesting movie.

The little girl isn't dreaming, though... She is in an insane asylum..... because, well of her relationship with the earth. She... is the earth. I guess. I don't know how to explain it. And in this last one, she's 'captured' again. The wind is heartbroken, because he thinks of the the little girl as his daughter.

I think if you read these in order, they'll make more sense.
heres how they go...
A light shower
A warm Dawn
Grandfather
A prayer for Solace

That's how they go.... hope it make more sense.
Thanks for your point of veiw.
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why, team Emmet of course.
Yeah that was the problem i had i started from the wrong point. It is a beautiful concept the center point of nature personified and persicuted by uncaring, and totally ignorant humans. now that i have read all of them it makes me think more of "The Green Mile" than of "Sublime," but i would still sugest seeing Sublime when you can.

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“It is only after we’ve lost everything that we are free to do anything”
Tyler Durden “Fight club”

“He who makes a beast of himself gets rid of the pain of being a man.”
Dr. Johnson “Fear and loathing in Las Vegas.”
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thanksss. I'm glad it makes more sense now.
Although, I liked your other point of view too. :]
I love the book and the movie.... stephen king is just..... amazing.
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why, team Emmet of course.
oh, I really really love this. Beautiful.

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You have four nostrils, just to let you know.
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may I ask whyyyy?
I'm glad you like it. :]

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why, team Emmet of course.
because...
its emotional (very) and I think it applies to everyone because everyone feels like they are being hunted down by something (I think anyway).

and it makes you care. which is rare in such short pieces.

I... think that's it. I hope you're all good mah dear:)

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You have four nostrils, just to let you know.
:D
that made me smile.
Thank you a bunch!
and I be good.
annnnd you?

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why, team Emmet of course.
Oh no! I have been doing nothing but crying this morning it seems every piece I read is a sad one... "They had taken his little girl" Just, such a powerful line for me. Amazing work.

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